Most artists earn low salaries and therefore should receive findings from the government in order for them to continue with their work.
To what extent do you agree?
Yesterday I read an article about the request of artists to the government for a financial support. This leads one to wonder whether governments should grant their request. This essay disagrees with this point of view for the following reasons.
The first reason is that they generate low income. Since the invention of TV and the Internet, people have begun to show low interest in art. This change in taste has caused a negative impact on how much money places of art can generate. Therefore, the government has nothing to take money to provide artists with extra aid. For example, according to the taxation department, over the last ten years the theaters in Karaganda city has caused a considerable loss in the budget of the city since they pay little tax, but request more money.
Another reason why the government should help artists is that there are more important areas of life to support. Apart from artists, authorities allocate money for doctors and teachers, who bring more benefits for society than artists. Thus, the state officials need to secure education and medicine with high salaries before they accommodate the needs of artists.
However, some politicians state that the government should fulfill the needs of artists. The main argument for their opinion is that they entertain society by their work. They claim that artists perform plays, exhibit pictures, and sing songs in front of audience to amuse them, but if the government neglect their requests for better quality of life, there will be none to show art to the public. For instance, on Nauriz day, artist from different regions come to Karaganda city to show customs and traditions of local nationalities. However, their number is decreasing every year because they see little governmental support. Despite this, firstly, the government should focus on the requests of society rather than artists.
In conclusion, governments definitely should not give an extra funding to artists, since art is not a profitable and relatively important area of life in comparison to other occupations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16913946588 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61246263837 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566765578635 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3956618841 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7777777778 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212894194202 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703587774572 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364142834116 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115882041209 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490110499362 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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