People in the current generation are not fit and active and it will cause health problems in the future What could be the reasons and suggest solutions for this issue

Essay topics:

People in the current generation are not fit and active, and it will cause health problems in the future. What could be the reasons and suggest solutions for this issue.

It is becoming a common phenomenon that people in the current generation are less fit and active than the previous one, which may result in health issues eventually. In my opinion, there are several reasons for this situation and solutions should be figured out to tackle this problem.

First of all, the popular fast food brings people not only convenience, but also high calories and sugar and it is accepted more by young people than mid-aged or elderly ones, In addition, people in the recent generation enjoy the efficiency and entertainment from high-tech products, such as smart phones and computers, whereas a large portion of people is somewhat addicted to them. In the end, they participate in much less outdoor activities, such as exercise and sports, which render them less fit and active than before. Moreover, nowadays some people are becoming so busy with their works or studies that they find it difficult to squeeze a bit of time for taking exercise. All of the reasons mentioned above are leading to a less healthy generation and they might suffer potential health issues, such as obesity, heart disease and depression.

In order to tackle this problem, the government should build up more public facilities, such as fitness centers and parks, and encourage people to strength their bodies. In the meantime, companies and schools should concern more about their employees and students, including their physical and mental health, instead of their work or study performance merely. For instance, they could organize their employees or students to get together and hold some activities, such as parties, to help them release their pressures and refresh themselves, so that they could stay active and energetic all the time.

To sum up, it should be taken into consideration seriously that people in the current generation are not as fit and active as before. However, this issue could be controlled if proper actions could be taken.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...eeze a bit of time for taking exercise. All of the reasons mentioned above are leading to ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, whereas, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13793103448 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6026210376 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570532915361 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.9940429165 49.4020404114 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0909090909 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32636537917 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131745851929 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823548673176 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23718525292 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116179849244 0.056905535591 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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