The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extend do you agree?
There is an opinion that preventive measures of medical problems have greater importance than medical care and medication. Thus, state budget should be commensurate. Personally, I somewhat agree with this opinion because government should take actions in order to prevent serious diseases and epidemics.
Firstly, it is true that if the authorities do not invest money on health in terms of prevention serious illnesses, it will lead to certain consequences such as increased number of different diseases among population. In the long term, it means that government will spend significantly larger amount of money on a therapy than they would spend on preventive measures. The major reason of it is that medications, operations, hospitals and complete medical care system is very expensive as well as an ill person is not able to work and contribute in the budget of a country through taxes. For instance, nowadays in America we can observe the situation that qualified workers who happened to become ill find themselves on the streets due to high rates on treatment and medical care.
Secondly, as citizens pay taxations they have right to receive all necessary services including various preventive actions such as proving healthy meals in public schools, free sports club programs for the poorest part of population as well as for school-children and the elderly. For instance, the authority of our city has launched a program for pensioners, which gives them opportunity to attend a swimming pool without charge. Old people taking part in this program have better heath indicators and tend to visit doctors less than others. Thus, governments should surely relocate part of financial resources on preventive actions.
In conclusion, I agree that governments should take into account that in the long term it is sufficient to prevent disease than spent money on a treatment and provide an adequate budget on preventive measures.
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...prevent serious diseases and epidemics. Firstly, it is true that if the authorit...
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...adequate budget on preventive measures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as for, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33116883117 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87719315104 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597402597403 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.0728745183 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.833333333 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232338598946 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836780525205 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594865137091 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152685588003 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585587251522 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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