the significance of art education
From the delegates voting in the general assembly of the United Nations to old woman working in small retailer, the majority of the society have been educated and admit the significance of education. Thus, it is very natural for people to wonder how to further advance the education system. While some people believe it can be achieved by rendering art and music as a mandatory course for young school children, others believe those classes should still remain as hobbies. From my perspective, art and music lessons should be selective as students are fairly occupied with their current schedule and such lessons are expensive.
The major reason for my propensity is that art and music lessons will put too much burden on students. The contemporary society, with increasingly sophisticated technology and the explosion of information, requires the students to spend more time on their study than the past few generations. For example, my niece, who is only 9 years old, have to stay in school for 8 hours a day and do over 2 hours of homework afterwards. Sometimes she would suggest that her parents should make her rest more as she tends to feel exhausted. However, under such circumstances, the subjects she need to put effort in are merely math, language and science. Provided that art and music are added to her schedule, it is obvious that my niece, along with other students, will be overwhelmed.
However, some people may argue that the school can reduce the time needed to finish a course related to art or music, which will relieve the children's burden. Admittedly, such approach is a way to balance the current situation. Yet, people cannot have a comprehensive understanding towards art and music until they put consistent effort in it. Once the school decides to reduce the time needed, the quality of art and music education will certainly be damaged, which means the time spent can be a waste. Therefore, such approach shall not be adopted.
Another important reason is that music instruments or art related tools are expensive. Parents will have to pay for the music instruments or drawing tools provided that they want their children to practice or finish school assignments at home. Take piano as an example, a mediocre level piano will cost the parents the money they saved for the children's college tuition fee. In addition, since music instruments shall be carefully preserved, parents will have to hire experts or learn how to keep the instruments in a good condition. Whereas some wealthy family can manage to deal with such requirements, a fair number of families may not be able to afford such expenses. Consequently, their children will not perform well on these classes. In other words, it is unfair for students who come from a underprivileged family.
In conclusion, music and art is good to the society, but it shall not be added to a student's schedule. A student should live with more ease and fairness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 7.85571142285 306% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 1615.20841683 152% => OK
No of words: 494.0 315.596192385 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96761133603 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72552038601 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504048582996 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 760.5 506.74238477 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1464872663 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.25 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165908441723 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449942705413 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529867991463 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10218436473 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687389973535 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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