In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

It is undoubtedly true that, most of the cultures believe that children can achive anything what they want if they work hardin their life. If children doing hard then they can achive their goal but sometimes or still they can not get their ambitions. However, they will be happy for this because they are trying over that.

On the one hand, children can achieve what they want after completing difficulties. In addition, sometimes it workers on the children at the age of teenager that time they can listen their parents order such as, a parents give a advice it is right so a child think it is right or they advice then wrong then they grow and carry with this cultures. Additionally, in our ancient culture give us and children to keep work hard it will be bring a success in your life. Furthermore, in our economical thinking if the children work hard in the age of newborn after that they can work anywhere and they can continue their life any situation in life. For instance, a children grow up in the age of birth and they can know how they have to struggle in their life then they can do anywork any place. Besides, in educational sides they wants children have to read for their better life and they are pressurize on them to work challenging in their life. For example, if a children doing hard work in their student life then they can caught their goal and success.

On the other hand, this ancient culture sometimes give in a children life curse like, a child grow up to bring this culture after hard working they can not get their achievements then they go on depression and sometime they are getting a risky decision and they think they wanted to end of their life. Moreover, most of the time children or people can not get their want after facing difficulties. Along with, it effect in the business sides FOR Example, A employee work in the company he or she want to build up their rank over the place after doing hard work the management of Company did not give them promotion on the company that time they get loose their hope and energy to the work then the business becoming lose their string portions. Besides, older people giving advice over the children they have to maintain this things after that they forced but it getting destroy in the children life.

To conclude, working hard children can achieve their goal but sometimes after doing this they can not get their success and it chnage a childern working, educational life and others. If you are continuing hard work and still did not achieve your goal so, it being a strong heart in your side and that time it doesn’t matter your loose, you will be happy reason is you did your best over there.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 24.0651302605 349% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 483.0 315.596192385 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55486542443 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27340128788 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.372670807453 0.561755894193 66% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.125683749 49.4020404114 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1875 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.01903807615 737% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373662994493 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197208346057 0.084324248473 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833945561571 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28747453583 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885318131989 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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