Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, it has become increasingly prevalent for the advanced artists to be appreciated by a numerous number of people and get paid with an enormous income. Meanwhile, others argue that it is unfair for the low-salary artists who need to be supported from the government. From my point of view, I strongly agree with the first view because some undeniable reasons below.
To begin with, the modern artists deserve to gain a high earnings because they are the gifted talents who create special artworks for society. This can be explained by the fact that not many people have the ability to devise the valuable things like them. This can be seen in the case of Picasso who has been famous throughout the world. As a result, I absolutely support the artful talents to achieve the high payment.
Furthermore, another crucial reason which should not be ignored here is that the advance artists produce many value-added objects for community. This means that they have a significant contribution to society by their specialized qualification. For instance, they combine the advanced technology such as AI design, 3D printing to create the videos for advertisement to bring a lot of money for manufacturers. Consequently, they are deserved to get a higher income than others
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, it is fair for the artists who have special talents to get huge earnings. Therefore, we need to encourage the children who are gifted in arts should develop their qualification not only to contribute to society but also to gain a big benefit in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'earning'?
Suggestion: earning
...e modern artists deserve to gain a high earnings because they are the gifted talents who...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0037593985 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83928182546 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2800959703 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.916666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197195360434 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686178691733 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423197401352 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116140121422 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321391346947 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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