Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is claimed that steps should be taken to solve unfair situations related to money between artists. Personally, I agree with this statement because this can create more job opportunities and maintain cultural diversity.
Notably, artists are usually underrated because of low income. However, some of them are extremely well-known and wealthy because their expertises are useful in daily life. As a result, many people will turn away from their current jobs and pursue high-paying ones, such as photographer or singer. And when people exceed the required number of jobs, thousands of people will lose their jobs. If the government can provide a small sum of money to these people, job loss can be solved considerably.
On the other hand, not only job loss is a worrying problem, but also diverse culture. As a lot of artists who create traditional products are unable to get by, they may give up and change to other jobs. Over time, lots of unique artworks will be lost forever and we will forget everything about meaningful stories hidden deep in the works and so our ancestors. For example, the pyramid, one of the greatest structures built by an ancient civilization, includes the mysterious lifestyle of ancient people, but we now know very little about them. Thus, artists should be provided a better job environment in order to maintain humanity's culture.
In conclusion, it is necessary to deal with the inequality between artists. Therefore, governments should create more jobs opportunities in order to maintain a multicultural world
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81325418208 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.650793650794 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0234602147 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153989309777 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050569762487 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048031957085 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098453154777 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523114251018 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81325418208 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.650793650794 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0234602147 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153989309777 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050569762487 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048031957085 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098453154777 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523114251018 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.