Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortages of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation.
Discuss both these view and give your opinion.
While a group of people argue that they should maintain the status quo, like earning a living wage and feeling low job satisfaction, others believe they ought to do their best to develop their situation. I agree with the latter, because not only can it cause more income, but it also provides them with a higher standard of living.
To begin with, those who support preserving their unsuitable conditions claim that any try may result in worsening their situation. These kind of people always try to avoid any difficulties in their life because they consider them as a threat. According to psychologists, this king of people is not determined enough to make a determined effort and meet any new challenges. Besides, they may have an easy-going personality which leads them to a stationary lifestyle. In this situation, their outlook on life plays an important role in failing to adapt or seek changing circumstances. The proponents of this approach cite to the evidence form state-of-the-art scientific researches which have revealed human being has prior inertia to any changes. Thus, they conclude that mankind has been hard-wired to unintentionally resist against any alterations.
On the other hand, the advocates of enhancing living conditions rightfully refer to the benefits that this change may bring to us. One of the most advantages seems to earn more money, meaning that it may improve the standard of living and results in better living conditions. Example can be seen in more industrialized countries, such as Germany and the UK, in which their citizens have to make concerted effort to improve their national wellbeing and welfare, thus these effort has boosted their social status and worked to the advantages of every member of the society. Moreover, these change, which virtually is for the better, make our life truly pleasurable, meaning that people always make changes in the pursuit of happiness. The supporters of this idea cite to the happiest countries, like Finland and Denmark, in which there is a direct correlation between happiness and industriousness. To the proponents of this idea, including me myself, these benefits appear to be convincing.
In conclusion, although some people do not like to move the times due to their personality or some psychological reasons, it seems advisable to make determined effort to improve our standard of living, live quality, and contentment. It would be a good idea to do our best and not be worried about the results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...ay result in worsening their situation. These kind of people always try to avoid any diffi...
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Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this effort' or 'these efforts'?
Suggestion: this effort; these efforts
...ir national wellbeing and welfare, thus these effort has boosted their social status and wor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 406.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15024630542 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92751475549 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536945812808 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9132970483 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8823529412 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122314457658 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367971803964 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314101973604 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759161054995 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159090721037 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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