Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere

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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere

Art has regained some of its lost glory and governments have started realizing the importance of preserving it. While some people welcome this trend, I completely disagree with this practice as I believe there are several other critical functions for the public administration to focus on.

It is widely accepted that the field of arts not only represents the contemporary lifestyle but also helps us to reflect back on the lives of our ancestors. Historical artifacts like sculptures and paintings that are exhibited in various museums attract a lot of visitors and generate some revenue as well. For example, the Kohinoor diamond of Delhi sultanate is a very famous exhibit in the British Royal Museum in U.K. But I believe that the cost of maintaining the museums and the salaries of curators easily exceed this income .Therefore, no official can justify this investment in art as it is not of any benefit to the general public.

What’s more, other critical functions of the society like public healthcare continue to be ignored by a lot of countries. Large sections of the community especially the underprivileged are deprived of basic health amenities like vaccines and preventive health checkups. For Instance, the disease of tuberculosis continues to affect thousands of Indians even today. If the government had diverted some of the funds invested in art to these areas, India would have had a stronger young generation. Therefore, I believe that public representatives should start thinking about these vital aspects instead of spending money on the maintenance of art galleries and reviving lost art forms.

To conclude, despite the fact that art contributes a lot to the society and tourism in general, I would like to emphasis the fact that governments should invest most of the funds in crucial services like the public healthcare which help in building stronger nations.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20588235294 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90058592233 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591503267974 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.4730432858 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.818181818 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8181818182 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192942475905 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631492484156 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486120243372 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10809586498 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474844193412 0.056905535591 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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