Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?
it has been claimed that the greatest advantage of being affluent is that it enables people to aid others. I strongly agree with this statement because a person can own an endless amount of possessions and yet not feel satisfaction. In contrast, the feeling of being meaningful and influential outweigh all sort of temporary excitement.
many wealthy people prefer to use their resources for a selfish aims such as gather more control and expand their properties. Strive for power and possession could never be fulfilled so they always want more. Hence they end up being depressed and lonely. For example, many celebrities are extremely rich, however, they waste their money in momentary thrills such as fancy cars, cloths, alcohol and drugs. Some of them are becoming addicted to these thrills and the result might be bankruptcy or in the worst case mental and physical illnesses.
however, wealthy people can also change the lives of others and by doing this they earn the great satisfaction of helping someone as well as they actually influence their lives. For example, Bill Gates which is one of the richest people in the world, contributes billions of dollars to asses children from poor countries. His organisation has already saved an extraordinary number of children. Every other use of personal fortune is inferior to the ability of helping others and improve the world.
In conclusion, from my perspective, there is nothing more valued than the privilege to support other people. If a wealthy person will choose to invest his money for selfish purposes he will probably get depressed, while helping others might be much more significant and satisfying.
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Comments
What an eassy! Great use of
What an eassy! Great use of cohesive words.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, sort of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15073529412 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67058327529 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647058823529 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8640431608 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.071428571 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192164859961 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596654230106 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385485187927 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109177296234 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239937155508 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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