The world would be a better place if we all spoke the same language Do you agree

Nowadays, scientists and technologists are pushing back the frontiers of knowledge every day and we have become very skilled at harnessing technology in all sorts of creative ways. Specifically, technology plays a major role in facilitating telecommunication. This trend has some negative effects on face to face communication while having great advantages. In this essay I point out drawbacks on using communication applications and offer some solutions to lessen negative impacts.

To start with, excessive usage of technology is isolating people and discouraging them from real interactions with members of family and society. Although virtual relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships, many people choose to make friends online rather than mixing with their peers in the real world. Also, they spend lots of their time on social media so they do not dedicate enough time to family and friends. Moreover, Individuals prefer to make phone calls or use applications like whats app to get in touch with their loved ones instead of paying visits to them in order to save time.

To have social interactions with others, our ancestors planned some traditions yearly or monthly to have a family gathering and thus improving bonding with other people, we can adhere to our ancestors' customs to improve our relationships with others and make new connections in the real world. For instance, ancient Iranians celebrate the coming of spring season as a renewal of nature by getting together and serving special meals. Moreover, we should manage our time while using social media so that we can dedicate enough time to spending quality time with the ones who are near and dear to us.

To conclude, although advancement of technology removes the barriers of time and distance in getting in touch with others, it has limited physical interactions between people. In order to overcome this issue we should take steps to renew our ancestors' customs that strengthen bondings and limit our usage of social media and communication applications.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 504, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...ke phone calls or use applications like whats app to get in touch with their loved on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, then, thus, while, for instance, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29051987768 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93763639053 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577981651376 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1303011169 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.076923077 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0574900772933 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0190652604634 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0224250336549 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0345581453243 0.151304729494 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0118595563411 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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