You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,a) describe the situatio

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,
a) describe the situation
b)explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
c) say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Madam,

My name is Rubesh and I’m pursuing my Masters in Robotic Automation (1st year). First of all at the outset, I would like to thank you for providing me a cozy hostel accommodation and I’m grateful for it. I’m actually sharing the room with another student, who is currently pursuing Psychology and human science in our college.
However, I’m facing quite a lot of issues, with my room partner and that is primarily the reason, why I’m writing this letter. Request you to please not treat this letter as a list of complaints against my roommate, but, rather try to understand my position and please do the needful. First things first, as indicated earlier, my roommate who is pursuing Psychology, tends to work at odd hours, keeping the lights on and listening to various pep talks and course materials on the Bluetooth loud speaker (he says, this talk enters into his sub-conscious directly). Myself being a light sleeper, I tend to get disturbed very easily and this leads to frequent headaches in the mornings, sometimes the entire day. Despite, trying to make him understand that I do need to catch up with some sleep, he keeps doing the same. Secondly, we both being of the same size, he borrows my clothes and goes to class. I don’t have qualms with that, however, the issue is, he doesn’t return it and this is then worn by some other friend of his the subsequent day and this goes on and sometimes, I don’t even, get my clothes back. Another incident which freaked me out and made me write this letter was, he once, air-locked the entire room and filled it up with incense smoke and had flooded the room with water, upto ankle length and was sitting bang in the middle of it, watching psychological analysis videos.
This totally shook me up and hence the need to write this letter. I request you to kindly provide me an accommodation with my department students, as it would help me to share notes and study combined with them.
Thanking you

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...ter. I request you to kindly provide me an accommodation with my department students, as it woul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, second, secondly, so, then, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 24.0651302605 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76436781609 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55885278455 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594827586207 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.9692764533 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.538461538 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7692307692 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260185285918 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966523658622 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674026280633 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183718794475 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213204220691 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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