Agree or disagree: In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Agree or disagree: In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

In the past time, children were extremely depended on their family, and all their decisions about everything such as marriage, working and so on were participated by their parents. However, time and people change a lot and children realize that it is their right to make their own decisions. In this following essay, I will concur with this idea.

First, by changing the lifestyles and technology, people become opened minder, so they make their own decisions. This technology enhances the knowledge of people even children and provides access to communicate with others. Children can search for their problems on websites or talk about their situation with others who had this situation too had been in the same position, and use expertise's experience.

Second, children have a better education than their parents, so it makes that children use their minds or other people that have better information about whatever they want. Some parents do not have an updated idea or perspective of subjects, and they think in the way of past time. Also, there is a wide gap between children's and parents' tendencies. So children cannot rely on their parents and just try to ask others who have the same opinion. For example, my friend wanted to open his store to sell clothes and stuff like this. However, his father disagreed with his idea and did not let him open his store because of his father afraid to be failed. Finally, my friend talked to one of the hypermarket's managers , ; therefore;, he used their experience to have a better chance.

In conclusion, because of technology and different tendency between parents and children, children make their own decisions and sometimes use their parents' experience.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
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Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
... subjects, and they think in the way of past time. Also, there is a wide gap between chil...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07092198582 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62167691436 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556737588652 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5776168447 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.142857143 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281104935193 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104607633063 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843424746191 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206984914971 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387908562574 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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