agree or disagree? today young people have better abilities to make decisions than pas young people

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agree or disagree? today young people have better abilities to make decisions than pas young people

As far as prosperous life is concerned, the ability of making decisions is a vital factor. As we know youngs live in their prime of time in which they can make their future flourishing or languishing depend on their talent in making decision. When the issue is comparison between young people in the past and now to such a power, some people think that past youngs had less deciding ability because of their dependence to parents. I, as a one, subscribe to this idea. In my opinion, today youngs are more decisive persons due to the change of parents approach and education system in societies.
In first place, primary element which has great impact in children is the method of upbringing used for them. It is crystal clear that, nowadays, parents are more aware about their behaviors' effects on their children's characteristics thanks to psychologists' attempts. In the past, parents were extremely strict, I mean they always forced children to do what they wanted. Today, all of us, parents aren't an exception at all, such a behavior harm children's self-confidence. They cannot rely on themselves to decide about their own lives. In contrast, if youngs grew in a productive atmosphere in which they were given not only responsibility but also opportunity to determine their own ways, they would improve their decision skills.

Secondly, it is not to mention that when we talk about a specific property like deciding ability, we must consider many other influential factors. For instance, activities like sports and social cooperation are some of the effective elements in making decisions. If people put themselves in the society and communicate with many individuals, their perspective would be improved. These days, educational system has been altered a lot in comparison to the past one. Schools have some subsidiary classes and projects besides education by which all students participate in different activities. Such a priceless condition bring them with a good chance to learn various skills. On top of this, they broaden their point of view by monitoring other horizons. By contrast, unfortunately, past students educate in schools in which they only learn some lessons like physic, mathematic and so forth. By keeping this big alteration in educational system in mind, we can say with the utmost confidence that today youngs' abilities are being effectively enhanced owing to above-mentioned participation.

In summary, by taking all of these into account, in my opinion the power of today youngs to make decisions is considerably incomparable with ones in the past. Who in their right mind can deny profitable rule of psychology awareness among both people and societies in having more decisive youngs?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... like sports and social cooperation are some of the effective elements in making decisions....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i mean, in contrast, in summary, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18409090909 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90749157031 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4530751334 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.681818182 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2230416762 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622292748963 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757286094654 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176310989545 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114996498504 0.0645574589148 178% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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