agree or disagree? today young people have better abilities to make decisions than pas young people

Essay topics:

agree or disagree? today young people have better abilities to make decisions than pas young people

As far as prosperous life is concerned, the ability of making decisions in each individual is a vital factor. As we know young people live in their prime of time in which they can make their future either flourishing or languishing depend on their talent in making decision. Many people are of the opinion that young people used to have less deciding ability because of their dependence to parents. I, as a one, subscribe to this idea. In my opinion, today young people are more decisive people due to the change of parents' approach and education system in societies.
To begin with, primary element which has great impact in children is the method of upbringing used for them. It is crystal clear that, nowadays, parents are more aware about their behaviors' effects on their children's characteristics thanks to psychologists' attempts, available up to date information and so more. In the past, parents used to be extremely strict, I mean they always forced children to do what they wanted. Today, all of us, parents aren't an exception at all, know that such a behavior can adversely harm children's self-confidence. They cannot rely on themselves to decide about their own lives. In contrast, if young people grew in a productive atmosphere in which they were given not only responsibility but also opportunity to determine their own ways, they would improve their decision skills.

Furthermore, it is not to mention that when we talk about a specific property like deciding ability, we must consider many other influential factors. For instance, activities like sports and social cooperation are some of them in making decisions. If people put themselves in the society and communicate with many individuals, their perspective would be improved. Modern reformed educational system provides students in a precious situation to do so. Schools have some subsidiary classes and projects besides education by which all students participate in different activities. These surplus classes give students a good chance to empower their abilities and knowledge. On top of this, they broaden their point of view by monitoring other horizons. It goes without saying that knowledge and wisdom obtained from the very experiences will give better ability to make rational decisions. By contrast, unfortunately, past students had not been learned in schools more than some lessons like physic, mathematic and so forth. By seeing this, it is not surprising that they were weak to decide about their lives on their own. By keeping this big gap between educational systems, in past time and now, in mind, we can say with the utmost confidence that today young people' abilities are being effectively enhanced owing to above-mentioned participation.

In summary, by taking all of these into account, in my opinion the power of today young people to make decisions is considerably incomparable with ones in the past. Who in their right mind can deny profitable rule of psychology awareness among both people and societies in having more decisive young people?

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Independent TOEFL Writing

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 448, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
... they wanted. Today, all of us, parents arent an exception at all, know that such a b...
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Line 4, column 1121, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... decide about their lives on their own. By keeping this big gap between educationa...
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Line 4, column 1177, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...big gap between educational systems, in past time and now, in mind, we can say with the u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, for instance, i mean, in contrast, in summary, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2555.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18255578093 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87030655055 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555780933063 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4472860679 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.458333333 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5416666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29850293075 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085275681798 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103147735845 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23749756155 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136990156474 0.0645574589148 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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