Ambitious dreams are better than realistic goals. Agree or disagree?
In today’s world, people have diverse plans in their life, some are mundane life goals while some are ambitious dreams. Personally, I strongly believe that individuals should have reachable goals instead of big unrealistic dreams. I feel this way for two reasons, on which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, concentrating on realistic aims and trying to reach them, people will have better mental health. To be more specific, when individuals have big and unrealistic dreams, there would be a less chance for them to achieve those dreams. Therefore, if they not to achieve their keen dreams, they may face various mental health problems, including stress, depression and despondent about their futures. In contrast, having achievable aims not only encourage people to strictly follow them but also leads them to have better mental health, since they will not experience high pressure and stress may coming from possibility of achieving their dreams. My own experience demonstrates this point. When I was a high school student, I wanted to be a doctor. In Iran, where I live, students need to pass an entry exam in order to be qualified for starting their programs at universities. Moreover, Medical Science programs are very popular among students, which makes getting an admission arduous. Therefore, I had to study hard to achieve my goal. Unfortunately, I couldn’t pass the exam although I have studied 12 hours a day for more than two years. As a result, I was very depressed not only because I failed the exam but also because I lost roughly two years of my life. Had I not had being a doctor in my mind, which was a big dream at least for me, I would not have depressed.
Furthermore, by focusing on realistic aims, people have more opportunity to follow further goals. Indeed, big dreams need strenuous effort, which means people cannot pursue different dreams at the same time, however, concrete goals need less effort meaning that people have enough time and energy to follow diverse goals all together. In other words, when people have big dreams, they need to concentrate precisely on their dreams if they want to achieve them. Hence, they can’t follow another plan as it may deviant them from their main way. By and large, this is possible to have different achievable goals at once, which makes me to believe that having realistic goals is more suitable than having desire dreams.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people have to choose realistic and concrete aims rather than ambitious dreams and try to pursue them in their life. Not only it makes them to have better mental health, but also it provides them opportunity for following and achieving more different goals at the same time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, at least, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, by and large, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93939393939 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56286196748 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482683982684 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2861234823 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.727272727 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.59090909091 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154256352463 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050053183019 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055810438406 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126624244923 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561902881189 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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