having ambitious dream vs having realistic dream
Some people believe that having ambiguous dream motivates you to achieve your goal. However, I personally prefer a opinion that having realistic dream is much better than having bigger dream. I feel this way for two main reasons that I will mention in this essay.
First of all, having realistic dream can motivate you to success your dream. If you have ambiguous dreams, you can be frustrated because the dream is really hard to achieve. However, If you have realistic dreams that you can achieve more easily, there is big advantage that you can motivate from your dream. Evidently, in the process that you try to achieve your proposal, you can get energy that helps you to reach your goal because you can believe your dream can be true. This can be demonstrated by my personal experience. When I was middle school student, I had a goal that get 100 score in school exam. In fact, It was impossible. So, I was frustrated by my dream. But, when I changed my goal to get 90 score in the exam, I can motivated by my goal because this goal is makes sense and I finally achieve this dream. This proves that the realistic dream can help people to achieve their dream more easily.
Second, having realistic dream helps you to make idealistic decision. If you have ambigous dream, you know it is almost impossible that you rely on your luck. This can be matter. You sometimes can have foolish decision. However, If you have realistic dream, you do not rely on your fortune and try to get your goal by yourself. This can help you decide more idealistic decision. This can be demonstrated by my personal experience. When I was middle school student, I had a dream that getting 100 score in school exam. This was impossible. I knew It can not achieve so I finally solve exam depend on my luck. I know that is bad way but I did not have enough time so I could not think idealisticly. This proves that huge dream makes you to have unidealistic decision.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that having realistic a dream is more helpful for your life than having unrealistic dream. Because you can achieve your goal more easily and efficiently and second reason is that
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...your goal. However, I personally prefer a opinion that having realistic dream is ...
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Line 3, column 734, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'motivate'
Suggestion: motivate
...goal to get 90 score in the exam, I can motivated by my goal because this goal is makes s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, so, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, you know, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5824742268 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4693842215 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.376288659794 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4877791143 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.8518518519 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3703703704 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346204791875 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149611165487 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15645867012 0.0737576698707 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.320423090772 0.150856017488 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558022378026 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.28 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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