It is hard to gainsay that overuse of electronic devices could be detrimental to young students’ health, and led by this fact, some credulous people generate the opinion that the time spent on using technology by young students should be limited to no more than one hour during the school day. However, before reaching a conclusion, a conscientious examination must be conducted. Considering effective study, social relationships, and feasibility, I strongly hold the view that limits on the time that students under twelve years old spend using technology during the school day are unnecessary.
First and foremost, high technology can help young students acquire knowledge effectively. To be more specific, after technology floods into education, young students are more easily to learn, since there are more ways to get information. For instance, they can use online meeting software to attend class when it is inconvenient to go to school, and it is accessible to search on the internet for their questions or just make a few clicks on cell phones. Meanwhile, because of the nature of children that they are curious about new things, technology can enrich the content and format of the class, including colorful pictures, virtual reality glasses, and communication with artificial intelligence, to focus students’ attention more on study.
Second, the fact that the development of technology has totally transformed the way people socialize indicates that young students need technology to maintain their social relationships due to. Take the case of my sister, a typical ten-year-old girl in elementary school: she uses WeChat, a social application on smart phones, to communicate with others every day, not only chatting with her friends, but also receiving school notices and submitting homework. If she loses her phone for one day, she will miss hundreds of massages, which will definitely ruin her studies and life. Had it not been for social media and smart phones, my sister could not keep close relationships with so many people.
A voice arises that for children, using technology too much negatively influences their health, especially considering their eyes have not fully developed. Ironically, it is not feasible to avoid or limit exposure to technology due to the development of social and science. With so many uses, such as online lessons, communication with friends, searching for information, and so on, it is difficult for parents to decide which of them to cut time for. It is more feasible for parents and teachers to teach young students how to use technology in a healthy way, like stepping away from the computer every forty minutes to stretch their bodies and relax.
In conclusion, I firmly hold that young students should not be limited on how much time they spend using technology during school days, especially when it comes to effective study, social relationships, and feasibility. There are one thousand Hamlets in one thousand people’s eyes, but I believe everyone who has read my article will agree with me.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25714285714 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8955264293 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54693877551 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.3270729813 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.529411765 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8235294118 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429936623371 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131991496839 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103565700935 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247084368185 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0898239024147 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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