Undeniably, the burden on children’s shoulders has been much heavier these days, since they have to spend a large amount of time on studying and other school activities. Led by this fact, some credulous people generate the opinion that children should be given more free time to do what they are interested in. However, before reaching a conclusion, a conscientious examination should be conducted. When it comes to their future development, the two most crucial tasks for children are acquiring knowledge and developing social relationships, and thus I firmly hold the view that children should spend most of their time studying and participating in school activities.
First and foremost, it is worthwhile to spend as much time as possible on studies, which is beneficial to children’s future academic and professional development. Having a successful life nowadays, like being a leader in a field and having a good reputation, depends much on attending a good university or even high school, and to achieve this requires excellent grades in school. For children, what they can do to entrench the foundation of their future life is to spend as much time as they can on study. Meanwhile, most jobs today require people to have professional skills since, due to the development of artificial intelligence, many repetitive tasks have been replaced by robots. Therefore, if a person does not want to be left behind by society, copious knowledge is obligatory.
Second, being involved in diverse activities is also indispensable because children can increase their social connections through them. When I was twelve, one of the normal millions of middle school students in China, I spent most of my time on various activities after school, such as basketball teams, volunteer work, and company tours. Children on the same team not only participated in basketball games together, but some of them also became my best friends. They drove off my loneliness and kept me company during my childhood. Even today, we always hang out and take trips together. Therefore, humans are gregarious animals, and children need to spend energy on various activities.
A voice arises that having little free time would make children stressful, and even lead to serious mental health problems. Ironically, if children have more time to do whatever they want, they are more likely to encounter sick situations. Most children have poor self-control. They have a great chance to form many negative habits, like being addicted to electronic devices and computer games. Having more free time would make this problem worse. In contrast, if children can schedule study and school activities properly, they can absolutely maintain a healthy mental condition. Learning new theories in class helps them gain a sense of achievement, and when they are tired, they can take part in colorful activities, enlarging their circles of friends and destressing themselves in sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2487.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28025477707 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89352120498 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554140127389 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4354830287 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.045454545 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356329027322 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103188250308 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101155444901 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224626222988 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828056020208 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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