In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with
other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes
the government has to pay for this care.
Many people say family shoud pay rather than government.
How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The trend of living in old age homes is becoming common where old people are taken care by the hired nurses. This care is funded by the law makers in many countries. Even though many would believe it to be family's primary duty to pay for this service, I assert, government must take a charge of this.
Primarily, it should be the law makers' fundamental duty that they need to reciprocate financially and by any other possible means to pay off grey-haired people who have served their country throughout their lives. This means that by being productive members of the society, the dedication and hard work contributed to make country better and developed. Hence, the higher authorities owe these aged people to financial subsidize for the taxes and services they gave at their young age by paying Provident fund, GST tax on items they buy many other and things. The repayment by governments to these old people can be done by giving them medical insurance, senior citizen card to get any basic services ranging from day to day grocery shopping, monthly electricity bill, and transportation cost either at free of cost or at very economical prices if possible.
In contrast, some people might think that governments generally have plethora of responsibilities on their shoulders already than focusing merely on subsidizing golden age people. Since many governments strive to make sure to fund infrastructure, public health services, educational fields and so forth, it tends to become a job of other family members now .To elaborate, older people generally save money or property for their later age which their family members keep, so these close family people must be made liable to pay any expenses made on looking after their old people. Let alone this practical and financial aspect, even, on the basis of moral values and humanitarian grounds, family members ought to pay for the care of old people.
In conclusion, despite having a view of one school of thoughts which make it obligation for families to pay for their old ones, I firmly have a perspective that it is an utmost job of any government to give funding for a take-care of their old citizens than leaving it on their families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9460916442 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69596220917 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566037735849 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.3920909105 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.818181818 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7272727273 20.6045352989 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324719349624 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130715916298 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566626194984 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219194643126 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564679584135 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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