Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development.
Playing and physical activities are the most important pillars of society in today’s world. Due to the fact we live in a chaotic and fast-paced world, it is important for us to pay more attention to children's activities. Playing games makes children feel they control their lives and it makes them feel relaxed in real life. Furthermore, parents have bourdon on children’s routines to improve their children’s lifestyle. In particular, it is impossible that children don’t use digital devices nowadays. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether children should play with their friends or simpler toys or whether they should play with video games and electronic devices. Some people possess the conviction that the former is more agreeable whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that the latter is more fruitful. I am personally content that this issue is multifaceted. Although children feel more satisfied with playing video, these devices make their indulge. Thus, I’d rather continue with the first approach. To substantiate my point of view the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind elucidating my standpoint is that playing with peers helps them improve their social circle and they can communicate with new people. Friendship is the most important stage and event in children’s lives, so they can gain good and moral friends by playing. Some of the durable friendship relationships that we have today are rooted in that time. Consider my personal experience to make this point more clear. When I was at elementary school I began friends with one of the students, whose friendship lasted until now and we had gone through different situations with each other.
The second rational reason behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that outdoor activities make children improve their mental ability by decreasing their stress. When we do exercises or do some outdoor activities it increases the dopamine in our brain and consequently, we can get a better reaction and think in a hard and crucial situations. For example, climbing or playing tennis can be good practices that children can play with their friends. It also improves their competitive traits in them.
In brief, due to the aforementioned reasons, I think, Playing with simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 288, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...gain good and moral friends by playing. Some of the durable friendship relationships that w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, for example, i think, in brief, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27480916031 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80200160988 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541984732824 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0922039479 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7142857143 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320098517359 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935106621688 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108415338172 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246370950004 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130296494319 0.0645574589148 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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