Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competitions or contests.
In the contemporary world, we have faced an exponential growth on the ways parents employ to bring up their children. There is no shortage of debate on the fact that children need to have physical activities during their daily life. Some adhere to the idea that children should only play sports for fun. Others subscribe to the viewpoint that children should play sports and take parts in competitions. Personally, I concur with the second notion; in what follows, two grounds will substantiate my viewpoint.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that children need physical activities to have better health condition. In addition, today's children have a thirst for progress due to their desire for glory and their formed mindset. So, it is literally inevitable for young ones to face the competitions. When scholars scrutinized the life style of different people from various countries through and through and compared their opinions about the ways of behaving toward children, they realized the fact that most of parents prefer that their children get involved in matches. In this regard, being in competitions can be a chance to unearth the latent talents of children and nurture them. Take a personal experience as an example; back in the first year of school, I was an energetic boy with an insatiable thirst to achieve goals in the field of football, yet the way our teacher treated us didn't satisfy me. So, I enrolled in a football gym and I pursued the implementation of theories that had been taught to become a member of the team. Not only did I improve my physical skills, but also, I learned to prove myself to others. In other words, it was a great chance for me as a person who wanted to boost his self-confidence. After some weeks of training, when I started the competition, all the aforementioned skills that I had achieved came into the picture and I won the match with all dexterity of an experienced athlete. Had I not attended to the importance of competition, I would not have been able to improve my athlete/athletic skills.
The second reason coming to my mind is that being in the competitive atmosphere is a great chance for one to improve his interpersonal skills. Getting involved in such an atmosphere, children learn to respect others and become receptive to others’ ideas. The more children spend time in competitive matches, the more seeds of having sociable people in the future are sown. Being open-minded becomes second nature to them. Participation in such matches teaches children that facing failures is the prerequisite of further success. Personally, I believe being an athlete competitions is the crucial prerequisite for young people to lead a vigorous life. If one is not able to find the ways of progress through being in matches, one is not able to run/live either an energetic or productive life. Consequently, one is not able to derive satisfaction from life. Relevant studies in Japan underscores the fact that there is a direct link between being in competition sports and future success of a student. This can be attributed to the fact that being in matches paves the way for a child to improve his performance and enrich his resume. In this respect, children in the competitions have the chance to communicate their beliefs efficiently and such interactions give some first-hand experiences to them.
To make the long story short, all the aforementioned grounds lead us to the conclusion that the idea that children should take part in athlete competition leads to more results for them than that of playing sports only for fun. There are more examples and reasons to discuss. However, it might cause some disadvantages too. My firm conviction is that being in restrictions and hardships, is a good opportunity for children to become disciplined and responsible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, in addition, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3187.0 1977.66487455 161% => OK
No of words: 643.0 407.700716846 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95645412131 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03561760524 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92199905152 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472783825816 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 981.0 618.680645161 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1281672869 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.806451613 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7419354839 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70967741935 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215220088474 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606569608439 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804467795167 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169230513189 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637208204327 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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