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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children should only play sports for fun, not in competitions or contests.

In modern era, most of the parents are concerned how they should treat their children in order to mind their mental health. In this regard, there is a long-standing controversy among psychologies how parents should face these circumstances while childhood has a prominent role in one’s adult. Some of the psychologies are inclined towards the opinion that children should not attend any competitions or any contests at all pressure while others hold exactly the opposite perspective. I firmly contend that children should enter competitions, which I will explicate my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, attending in big contests will brings a lot of experience to children and as they grow up they can use these experiences in order to be more successful. In professional contests, most of the competitors have a lot of experiences in big events which it helps them to win and achieve credits out of it. Most of the champions in Olympic are young people, which they started their profession when they were children and accomplished this far. For instance, Kimia Alizadeh was only 4 years old when she started her profession and she got into many competitions as a child and as she grew up and gained a lot of experiences, she selected to participate in Olympic. As a result, she got bronze medal in Taekwondo in 2016 Rio Olympic, when she was only 18 years old.
Another worthwhile reason is to learn how to cooperate with others and learn about team work functionality. Cooperation is part of any competition, even if they don’t win the contest, which they will be able to use this skill in different part of society including school, team works and among family. For exemplify, eighty percent of children that are part team works will learn how to chiefly concentrate on their task. On the other hand, results also demonstrate that these children are much more successful in their social life than the others.
In summary, those children that enter competitions can achieve not only experiences for bigger events like Olympic but also they learn cooperation with others as a team member. So benefits of these contests are enough to build children’s future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...od has a prominent role in one’s adult. Some of the psychologies are inclined towards the o...
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Line 2, column 52, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...oremost, attending in big contests will brings a lot of experience to children and as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, for instance, in summary, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01369863014 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86546529367 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6807257998 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170484368129 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061348918108 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419761732812 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118499476746 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513472077883 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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