Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Children should only play sports for fun not in competitions or contests

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competitions or contests.

Sports is the best way to improve the mental and physical health of the children. However, some people get biggoted respect to the sports implication in their children's life. They think that sport shoud not be prioterized more than a entertainment which I am strongly disagree. I feel this way for two reasons that I explore in the subsequent paragraph.

First, nowadays, people can build up the sport as their career. Sports entertainment has gone far more successful in recent time that person can earn a money and fame simultaneously. In order to make sure their future success in any sports, they should be given freedom and access of choosing their interest of sport since their children. Unless, they practice well enough and participate in the many competiton as they can, their confident and skills in the relevant still remain low. In opposite, they can shine their name in the whole word through playing good game. There are many example in the world whom playing sports got fortune. If their parents had stopped them playing in any competition, they would never lived a prosperous life that they use to live now.

Secondly, Playing a cometition gives the children a confidence in social event. During the any competition, they have to face a large number of public watching them. By facing them from their earlier stage, it become use to for them and they might not stumble when they have to do something in big mass in the future. On the other hand, playing a team sports in the competition, they exercise their interpersonal skills like collaborating with their team member and handling the pressure of the certain atmosphere. My personal example shed light in this situation. When I was in my school time, I loved to play football and participated in number of the tournaments. At that time, I connected with my number of different friends and coordinated with them in the game infront of large mass. As a result, I was confident in public meeting and able to communicate with the other while meeting a certain goal.

In light of above mentioned reasons, I feel the parents should let their children to particpate in the sports' event. They should change their perception towards the consequences of the sports as its scope have been profilerating much more.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...some people get biggoted respect to the sports implication in their childrens life. Th...
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Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...port shoud not be prioterized more than a entertainment which I am strongly disag...
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Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disagreed'.
Suggestion: disagreed
...han a entertainment which I am strongly disagree. I feel this way for two reasons that I...
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Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun example seems to be countable; consider using: 'many examples'.
Suggestion: many examples
...rd through playing good game. There are many example in the world whom playing sports got fo...
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Line 3, column 753, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...never lived a prosperous life that they use to live now. Secondly, Playing a co...
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Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... the any competition, they have to face a large number of public watching them. By facing them fr...
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Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...acing them from their earlier stage, it become use to for them and they might not stum...
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Line 7, column 104, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...let their children to particpate in the sports event. They should change their percept...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, i feel, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89405684755 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70215800546 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545219638243 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8691106179 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1904761905 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160028729631 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545310869955 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336825005092 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110989841626 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141287263494 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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