Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, governments have limited resorces and they can not spend their budget for everything. There is no doubt, that both art and sport are important for every nations. However, in my point of view government should spend money to support artists.
Olampic teams have a lot of fans who are very interested in sport and can spend a lot of money to watch a game. The games and championships are advertised from TV, radio and social media all the time to give people information about matches and games to attract fans. As a result, a lot of private companies wanted to be a sponsor for sport teams because company owners know that that would be lucrative contract for them. But finding fainancial aid to support artists is probablly impossible. We all know that sport teams always have more than four sponsers but painters and teather players have problem for having a good life. thus, government can support them and this definitly help them to improve their art.
Moreover, a large number of every society are artists and a lot of jobs can be categorize as art related job. In contrast small proportion of people are athleths. Thus, it is better to spend budget for large number of people. Support of this specific population can have a great influence on quality of life and people’s satisfactin. On the other hand, artists are emotional persons who need more attention and their work should be peresented to other people. whitout any support the art can not pass through generation to next generation. For example, My father is a master of traditional music instrument but he said he never had a chance to show his art to people and he never found a student because of this reasons he finally changed his job and become a farmer.
In addition, art present the culture of country to the world makes other aspect of life better and help to develop new methods. for instance, in car manufactry art can be shown in design of car exterior or in building of house and bridges art can play an important role. Specially in film and music production we can see the culture and beauty behind the art and this is a good way that a country to show their desire and goals to other nations. Govenements would like to have these impacts so they should spend more on the arts.
In conclusion, I believe that government should help artists because art is importand and critical for our society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71904761905 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53450563638 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507142857143 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2779418179 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.380952381 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18386801263 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622391950976 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551999319794 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111804654237 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377847477436 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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