Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is hard to deny that infrastructure is one of the most important factor for citizens’ daily life, and such a fact leads impressionable people to generate the idea that governments should still spend money to improve public transportation rather than to improve Internet access. However, this statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies and it should be examined meticulously. As far as efficiency, economy, development are concerned, I strongly hold that it is more important for governments to spend money improving Internet access.
First and foremost, developing Internet access is a more effective way to improve the efficiency of our society, as Internet almost involves in every aspect of people’s social life, including work, study, and entertainment. If the situation of Internet access get improved and provide steady internet connection, workers can use it to hold online conference and students can use it to watch courses from the websites. Therefore, people save the time from commuting to do other things that are more meaningful and productive, forming a synergy to increase efficiency of the whole society.
Furthermore, the fact that poor Internet access leads to huge economy loss indicates that governments should invest more money to improve Internet access. Take the case of The Rainbow Company in Shanghai, which earns revenue mainly by mining bitcoin on the internet. There was a time when the internet access suddenly broke down in the avenue where the company is located, all of their work were forced to pause and wait for the access to recover. During the time the government fixing Internet wire and other facilities, the company has a loss of 289 million RMB. Had it not been for the internet crackdown, the Rainbow Company would never suffer such a huge loss.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that public transportation is more important because people will use it everyday. Ironically, the public transportation systems nowadays are actually well-established and it is convenient enough for us to travel from one place in the city to another. In comparison, the internet systems are not stable yet, which need more attention and budget from governments.
In a nutshell, I maintain that spending money on Internet access is a more crucial task for governments. Admittedly, as my favorite quote goes, “as long as the reason of man continues fallible, different opinions will be formed”, and some people may oppose me. However, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...re important because people will use it everyday. Ironically, the public transportation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2800982801 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94603508522 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0916809431 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.411764706 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355174820865 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1130800346 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0942279987598 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190952293468 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841233988401 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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