Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is much easier for people to achieve
success without their family members’ help now than in the past.
It has been a controversial question between people that has become easier to achieve success alone and without family members’ help by progress in technology in modern era than in the past? Some people believe it is easier and others not. I do disagree with this statement, and I will justify my reasons in the following essay.
The first vital point which comes to my mind is that in this era, people need more skills to become confident about their success, and it needs a lot of money to learn these skills. These skills have impacts on all period of life, and lack of them is weakness. In addition, people cannot learn them without income, and they are essential for finding a job and making money. So how can people learn them without their family support? I illustrate the content with an example. In our country, there is a great exam which rank high school students, and in order to that, universities accept students. So if students want to study in excellent universities, they have to succeed in that test. At this huge competition, whether they learn more, they earn more, and anybody cannot succeed only with effort and trying. They need a lot of classes and books which they have to pay for them and without family’s financial aids. Moreover, the first criterion which it will be checked in employment process is their university, and people will have a long way to succeed, if they do not have a good educational background.
Another noteworthy reason is that with growing societies, people become alone and without their family’s empathy, they will face serious mentally and emotionally problems. In order to succeed, people have a long way to go, and in every single crisis they may give up. At such situation family members worth a lot, and they can encourage them and help them to return into the right path. For instance, I remember when I was studying at university, many time, I was becoming disappointed. But my mother was encouraging me to study and her advices like a light was brightening my correct route. I can say this with dare that without her, it was probable that I abandon university.
In conclusion, I think people cannot achieve success easily without their family member’s help in modern social life. They need financial aids from their family to gain vital skills which bring success. In addition, they may face with serious psychological problems when they have not their family’s support.
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- TPO47 80
- TPO43 85
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 454, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...mber when I was studying at university, many time, I was becoming disappointed. But my mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91626794258 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66040325381 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514354066986 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.963975105 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4090909091 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310819073403 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966204227941 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924544513116 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24595751264 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123277555524 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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