Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I have once bought a stick tape, which is claimed by the advertisement that it can stop the leak of the water pipe immediately. However, the actual product cannot even stick on a plastic pipe. That is, I believe all products look better on commercial than they actually do base on my experience. I will elaborate on this statement by the two following ideas.
At the very beginning, advertisements exaggerate the good part and try to hide the flaws of their product. In other words, viewers are often fascinated by the good quality and function of the goods by the eyes-catching advertisement, and neglect to see the downsidesof the product. The refrigerator my father bought is a good example in case. He bought a refrigerator when he saw it on a TV commercial. The selling point of this freezer is that it can freeze your drink within 5 minutes. Although this freezer can freeze my dad’s beer in five minutes, it has to use twice the electricity power to manage its function. At last, my dad has to switch to a more power-saving refrigerator to cost down the electricity bills. In this case, I believe products look better on advertisements since you cannot see the bad parts of it.
In addition, companies hired celebrities to be part of their commercial which makes people believe the product has decent quality since their idols are using it. Try to recall the advertisements you have seen, nearly every one of them has a celebrity in it. For example, the famous basketball player Jeremy Lin has a commercial about an energy drink. This makes people think he might also consume this drink when he is playing in the court, so one has to buy this drink in order to increase their performance on the court. However, this idea is nonsense. Celebrities recommend products to fans is just because they can earn money by through this process, not because the product is extremely handy. People always think products are so good when the celebrity used it. Sadly, that is not true. Products are just made to look good on commercials.
All in all, products are not as good as they appear on advertisements since companies will only points out the bright side of their product and hired celebrities to convince the products are used by people even like them, which navigates people to believe the goods are good.
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- TPO 48 Integrated Writing Task 80
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...just made to look good on commercials. All in all, products are not as good as ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, look, so, as to, for example, in addition, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74937965261 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76921520492 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488833746898 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7830989838 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162045378789 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484833369904 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421176462736 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109047735687 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243562496663 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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