It goes without saying that, we as Homo sapiens, live in an age when everything ends in money (everything is summed up in money). You could not find anyone in the world that hates money. Whether believe it or not, it is universally accepted the money is the major game-changer in our life, so that by it you can overcome your problems or cover your faults. Although owning huge capital is considered as superiority, I personally believe that owning money is perfect up to a level that does not keep us avoid from human principals and do not turn us to evil. The following essay takes a look at the statement whether most businesspeople have a strict inclination for earning money or other incentives interfere?
There is no denying that most people addicted to collecting much money and neglecting to enjoy from moments. They find ultimate pleasure in being wealthier than before. If you obtain much money, up to some point: your future would be a guarantee, you could be able to avoid some stresses, ability to struggle in some cases, your prestige would go up and even you could be able to change or break rules. For regular people perception of getting involved in the trap of earning excessive money is hard. Indeed, ambitious for being wealthier, moreover intrinsic factors, has extrinsic incentives.
Beside money fascination, businesspeople always are responsible for protecting their capital that they tried for many years to reach the present point. The key is to make their business more powerful and strong and it is feasible by more investment and finding the new financial source. Having a financial competition with the rivals to assigning more and beneficial contracts is another possible reason. When businesspeople couldn't have required financial competence they may lose their major market for their rivals. Hence, if this trend goes on for many times that businessman may go bankrupt.
All things considered, we can find that all entrepreneurs do not have wealth madness, and other incentives may force them to accumulate more dollars, like fame, social condition, professional conditions, patriotic belief or gaining experience for their carrier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 42, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...eside money fascination, businesspeople always are responsible for protecting their capita...
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Line 6, column 427, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...er possible reason. When businesspeople couldnt have required financial competence they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14084507042 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81600830913 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594366197183 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8274526527 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0625 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0625 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260730309854 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781786241817 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476881317274 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136206857273 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488252549865 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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