it goes without saying that, we as Homo sapiens, live in an age when our lifestyle has undergone profound changes and became more sophisticated. by this definition, the swift and monumental scientific and technological achievements have triggered to change in values and being wealthy become a value. in this regard, some people take a point of view that having money brings happiness, while others repudiate this notion. the following essay takes an elaborating look at released statement to reach a rational conclusion that whether it would be happy without huge possessions.
there is no denying that money is remedial in the life and provides convenience and joyance as well as gives power and penetration. in fact, by considering this advantages some people define their targets based on the earning massive capital. they say that there is no glory at being poor, conversely, wealth gives the courage to do what you want. for instance, by having great possessions you can enroll your offspring at the well-known universities or if they get unwell you can cure under the consideration of high-skilled doctors. suppose in the present time one person with money and without money, in which case he would receive high public respect?; definitely when he is well rich.
on the other side, although financial superiority benefits us in some cases, it takes some responsibility on our shoulders too. help for poor, sharing in NGOs, and paying taxes properly would be ideal examples here. others believe, at first glance having excessive money seems marvelous and appealing but its annoyance is more than convenience. admittedly, rich individuals have more stress on how they must handle their business not only preserve their investments but also get more prospered. Therefore, a group of sociologists and psychologists carried out an investigation at ANU University to find a relation between happiness and wealth. Ultimately, they announced that heart attack in wealthy-rich persons is higher than normal people by 26 percent.
to wrap it up, according to the aforementioned materials we can reach a conclusive conclusion that being rich is good providing not devastate out human values. a rich lonely is not desired when it is approved that it associates with noble.
- Do you agree or disagree：the best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers’salary. 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People would be happier withfewer possessions. 78
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Younger school student children (age five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math science, history, and language. 90
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, as well as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26648351648 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95617033718 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637362637363 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.184618081 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.764705882 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4117647059 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153517385464 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439534463114 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496108848145 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849742376978 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372181073733 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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