Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Is the truth that movies and television have more negative impacts than positive impacts on children's behavior? When it comes to the question of more or less, the answers differ from individual to individual. Some are adamant that young people will be fully influenced by negative behavior in movies and television, while others hold the opposite statement. Both of the counter statements appear to be convincing and stand on reason, yet my personal experience and real-life examples have led me to conclude that it is more negative effects for children to watch movies and television.
To begin with, young people can not distinguish between reasonable real-world behavior and ridiculously unreal behavior, and watching movies and television might cause these children to be confused. To be more specific, we can find many unlogical plots or unreasonable interactions between actors, which might provide entertainment to adult, in movies and television, but young people, who lack the ability to determine what really can do in the real world and the ridiculous behavior in these programs, might influence their behavior. For example, mischief others and effortlessly get impressing flairs to solve problems easily are common plots in movies and television, so children might consider that it is common to always make some tricks to others who gradually feel annoyed and delude themselves that they don't need to spend too much and they can solve any adversity in life.
In addition, it is easy for children to addict to relaxing things, and they frequently addict to movies and television. That is to say, young people might spend too much time on movies and television, and they are not willing to leave them to do other necessary work such as studying and exercising because watching movies and television can make them forget the pressure in life so that these become the approach for children to escape the adversity. For instance, school grades and peer interaction are a major pressure that is bothering young people, so they want to evade movies and television to forget this pressure. Then, they will gradually find movies and television to make them relaxing and happier, so they are unwilling to leave these programs.
In conclusion, young people are affected more negatively than positively by movies and television. That is, because young people are apt to addict and lack of distinguishing, movies and television are not suitable for these young people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 813, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...annoyed and delude themselves that they dont need to spend too much and they can sol...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, more or less, to begin with, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19298245614 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75133411011 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483709273183 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.2391242773 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.384615385 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6923076923 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238006013743 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110909284328 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754846939256 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180349124718 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915830448919 0.0645574589148 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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