Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Financial management is very important for everyone in his/her life. In part because the people can manage their costs and revenues. Some parents I am sure would believe that it is a crucial factor, If children want to become financially responsible adults, they should learn to manage their own money at young age; others would disagree. In my view, financial management has positive effects on children for two important reasons.
the main reason is that children practice for their future. What I mean they learn how to expense and manage their money for different aspects. For example, my father give me some money to monthly costs several years age. I try to control my purchases and the reminder of my bank account. If I finish my money earlier than the end of month, I could not buy the essential needs up to the end of month. Hence, I have to manage my money. As you can see, the children will not become successful in financial management of their lives , if they didn’t practice in at young age.
Another reason is that children understand the value of money. This causes children manage the expenses and help the family economy. For instance, I remembered my childhood friend that he pays attention to his costs and write his purchases in his own notebook. This work influences on the next purchases, if those is increased. So he found out that he should decrease the expenses. This experience taught me that understanding the value of money are very beneficial for children management at financial responsibility.
In sum, though some parents may oppose this topic, in financial management have many positive effect on children. Not only will practice for their real future lives but also they can understand the precious of money. Every parents should learn management types such as financial management to their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, for example, for instance, i mean, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97411003236 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65122240277 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514563106796 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.714951892 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.85 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.45 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289512578943 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098569342013 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804077566135 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197848682944 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492466012221 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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