Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of a doubt, the predominant dream of every human being epitomize in a proper career. Whenever I watch a kid show, I always face to the same question, " what's your dream job?". This evidence corroborates the importance of a decision for the future occupation. A job, not only provide the people with a stream of money, but can alter the mental and physical condition of his or her life. Despite the argument asserting that finding a proper job is the hectic life of today is easier, I believe otherwise, maintaining the fact that the more time passes, the harder to specify a secure and prosperous job. There are several noticeable reasons, two of which, technology and overpopulation, will be elucidated in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, the unprecedented burgeoning of technology in recent decades thoroughly effected jobs and careers. Elevating the level of livelihood, the technology also brings about new vocation and even altered the meaning of success. For illustration, take my grandfather. Undoubtedly, it was a simple decision for him to find a proper job and achieve success. The stable status of economy and a steady progress of technology was a mirror which reflected the future of his career. On the other hand, When I was a child, rarely did people have a cell-phone and not so long after, it was a commonplace to have a compact device in your pocket and make a call whenever you want. This rapid growth of technology complicated a decisive choice for a career. It is probable to emerge new job in the near future and also to extinct present job.
The second motive has to do with the boom of population and its influence on job opportunities. It is an axiomatic truth that this massive growth of population gives rise to new demands and ensuing new jobs. But this is not the whole story. In this modern life, the competition is the most momentous element to find a proper job. Accordingly, nowadays, thousands of peoples are graduating from universities; Skillful, talented people who are eager to pursue their dreams in a career. Consequently, were a person not to be prosperous in his or her career, it would result in dire consequences, namely, unemployment. Thus, compared to recent decades, the emerging new competitors efface the security and success of a job.
To put it briefly, I vehemently believe that all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that finding a job and be prosperous in is exceedingly arduous. In the end, despite mentioned motives, I find it very difficult to reduce this topic to two simple reason, technology and overpopulation, hence, this constantly-changing world has always something in his sleeves to surprise us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, briefly, but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, thus, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98461538462 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05338247649 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2430869309 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6086956522 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7826086957 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191126982916 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499405368748 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333937273253 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10792114773 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389701246817 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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