Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations.
Sentiments converge on whether people spend plenty of time to complete their tasks as an acknowledgment for their great endeavors and achievement in learning. While some people censure formidably this pragmatic, I am in opposition due to the change in people's beliefs.
To begin with, there is no denying that people always want to have fun with their enjoyment; however, achieving a good position in a society or business is the aim of every person. With this objective, it leads to the focus of people that they will concentrate on doing work. Take my father as an example, he is the exemplary model of this theory. He turned down the chance to hang out with family and go to the company to sign all the documents in order to satisfy his boss so that he can have a chance to be appointed for promotion. Through this instance, we can assure that people nowadays spend more time on their duties.
Another reason to prove the question statement incorrect is that humans tend to lose the thread in doing their personal things. The statistic from the government signifies that teenagers’ and young adults’ hang out rate drops rapidly compared to the last 5 years. This means that people do not put their personal joys as their priority things to follow because they have to adapt with the present. There are myriads of things they have to take care about such as family, work, fitness, and study. Besides that, many households seem to restrict their kids to do their leisure activities such as hanging out with their friends multiple times. As a result, kids cannot spend time on their personal enjoyment as much as the thesis mentioned.
All things considered, people at the moment tend to put their duties first because of the change in life, people do not spend most of their schedule on their joys anymore.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, so, while, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7619047619 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46896381361 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568253968254 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1754349581 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.142857143 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217146709483 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837519189207 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672397221096 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134703700943 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243715629161 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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