In some countries, it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?
Recently, many parents around the world are following the tendency of giving their children formal learning during the age of four. This idea has been receiving a great deal of public attention; however, I strongly advocate that the offspring should start schooling until they are seven or eight due to many benefits it brings, which I will list below.
To begin with, I recommend that all kids should not go to school at four years old because of the lack of concentration. This means that if parents force their children to study too early, their kids will not acquire a hundred percent of the information that teachers transmit. This not only wastes the parents' money but also puts too much pressure on children. Furthermore, instead of schooling, children need to learn other things which are suitable for their focusing level such as learning how to communicate with older people or how to do personal hygiene. From these activities, children not only can reduce the amount of work but also train the kid to be the best version at their age.
Another benefit of schooling at the age of seven is that at this moment, children already have more awareness of the outside world and events. It means that children can quickly adapt to new knowledge that they are studying at school which means that they can learn more effectively than a kid at age four. For example, according to Medline Plus, students at age seven to nine can focus about one hour compared to only fifteen minutes at age four. Besides that, it is safer because too young, the kids cannot protect themselves if they face bad teachers.
In brief, the parents should not let their offspring go to school too early so that they will not waste their money and parents do not have to put too much pressure on their kids too early.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 303, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, in brief, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70476190476 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34749830656 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.9036607731 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247010277841 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930477878417 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503219811204 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144822061312 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351819448574 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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