Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, No one cast doubt on entertainment activities has paramount significance in society and families; it is becoming quite trendy among all people. I empathize that individuals do not attend to things they should do; rather, they prefer to do personal enjoyment-task. If I were asked to determine a couple of reasons standing behind my points of view, I strongly suggest that the nature of human being and evolution of thereof, there are more time to leisure, and the demand to surpass the depression of human in the recent time may be reasons of this theory. I will manifest my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
It is without an adumbration of doubts that the nature of human seems to be a lazy one, thereby putting their duty and responsibility off, and spend much their time to the enjoyment and fun, it is difficult to carry out such thing that a human does not like; It is boring and mundane. My personal example is compelling evidence for what I mean; when I was working in an Automotive company in my twenties- 20 years ago- I personally decided to resign, in that those quotidian tasks made me the boring one; hence I decided to resign and make better future by doing whatever I want to do.
It also goes without declaring that nowadays people by means of technology and improvement of life quality of human life can spend too much time to their entertainment. Nonetheless, they spent more money on their enjoyment rather than past entertainment. To be more specific; In the shot down of the Coronavirus, the more people work online in the night hours and assign your day time to hike, sports, watching movies, camping and so on. not only are these enjoyments vantage to task doing quality but lead labors to unique creativeness.
It can be summed up in accentuating that everyone spends most of your time on the satisfaction of your demands, such as enjoyment for doing tasks and duty recently. The evolution of human being's nature, enough more time, depression of human beings lead to such a situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 458, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'enjoyments'' or 'enjoyment's'?
Suggestion: enjoyments'; enjoyment's
..., camping and so on. not only are these enjoyments vantage to task doing quality but lead ...
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Line 9, column 189, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...d duty recently. The evolution of human beings nature, enough more time, depression of...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, nonetheless, so, i mean, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80341880342 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80639073009 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566951566952 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.9150156242 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.5 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31513778807 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117680286467 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136944865384 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190724869712 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549974949732 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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