Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Television advertising directed toward young children(aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Television is an important source of entertainment and information for people of all ages. Personally, I firmly believe that advertisements on television should not be targeted towards children under five. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, children under five may not be able to decide if the product in the advertisements are beneficial to them or not. They cannot fully comprehend what the purposes and functions of the products in the ads. Therefore, they cannot judge the positive and negative aspects of the item. One of my experiences clearly illustrates this point. Once while watching the news channel, one of younger cousins was confused about a wine commercial. He questioned why he could not drink the beverage if it were “good”. Even though this advertisement was not targeted solely towards children, this example still demonstrates that young children cannot understand the advertisements. Consequently, TV ads should not be directed towards the young.
Furthermore, toddlers are have not matured enough to understand the concept of money. Children need to learn that money does not come by easily. While ads show them various toys and products, these commercial also shower them with consumerism beliefs. My friend’s younger sibling grew up watching commercials on television, and found the toys shown deeply interested him. As my friend’s family is well-off, her parents did not refuse to purchase the toys when he asked. However, he soon believed that if he did not own the latest or newest products, he would be deemed “unpopular” by his peers. This suggests that children may be susceptible to the ads and may not have the correct habits on money in the long term.
In conclusion, due to children under five not having the ability to comprehend the ads and them not understand the concept of money, I believe it is inappropriate for television advertisements to be targeted towards children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17027863777 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02218883564 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569659442724 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4066096794 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8947368421 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24405064502 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720864132599 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956537847523 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169729921005 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694038088478 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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