Do you agree or disagree the following statement:
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young poeple are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
No matter in the past or in today's society, it is very common for young people to seek advice about their lives from the elder generation. However, I think young people in the past are much more reliant on their parents than their peers in today's society, sepecially in my country. They tent to follow their parents instructions about what to do, who to marry with and try their best to live up to their parents' expectation. Although "too mach" is here is so vague that we can hardly proviede a precise definition, I think if a young man is dependent on his parents to help him make decisions about his occupation and marriage, he depends on them to much. This phenomenon is very common for young people in the past. While in contrast, we can hardly observe this in today's society.
In ancient China, young people did not choose their own wives or husbands. When they are teenagers, young people have little chance to get close to the other gender. A boy was tought that what matters was to honer the whole family and his ancestors instead of persuing the love of a girl. While for a girl, the biggest vietue is to be reserved and never show up in front the public. Then at a proper age, it is the parents who decide their spouses from another family which is equivalent to them in fortune, social status and so forth. Those young people tend to follow their parents’ decisions with no complaint. In contrast, this kind of marriage is rare in today’s China. Nowadays, young people can freely fall in love with someone with same interest, attitudes towards life or so on. When they decide to get married, it is out of their own choice instead of the parents’ decision.
In addition to marriage, young people in ancient time can not freely choose their career either. Cases were usually like this, either the young man inherit his father’s occupation or pass the national test held by the government to become an administrative officer. If the family can afford the cost of education, the young man will be sent to a school with the expectation that he may become a government officer to honor the whole family. Otherwise, he may have to inherit his father’s occupation to become a farmer, a shoemaker, a businessman, etc. Young people tend to accept their parents’ decision in choosing their career. While things are totally different nowadays. Before entering a university, young people can choose their own major based on their own interest and talent to make preliminary preparation for their future career. Parents’ decisions may have influence in their choices but are not decisive any more.
For those contrasts, I think we can reasonably conclude that today’s young people are much less reliant on parents then their peers in the past.
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- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to 70
- Do you agree or disagree the following statement:In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young poeple are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 73
- Do you agree or disagree the following statement:In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, while, as to, i think, in addition, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2322.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84759916493 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6673297903 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478079331942 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1183436149 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.75 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9583333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416322974039 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130735036309 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09945705905 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283879756333 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766611811679 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.