it goes without saying that, we as Homo sapiens, live in an age when our lifestyle has undergone profound changes and became more sophisticated. by this definition, the swift and monumental scientific and technological achievements have arised two main issues; occupational activities and entertainmental activites. Indeed, some people are in belief that having individuals should do other activites not attributing their business, while others take another point of view and repudiate this notion. the following essay takes an elaborating look at whether it is decent to choose activities related to their job or not.
there is no denying that working and having othe tasks like hobbies, sports, social activities and artisitc activities apart from it build our life schedual. in fact, during our working period we attain several skills and experiences in that field. therefore, it is suggested to select amusment activities far from our job for acquiring additional knowledge and information. for instance, suppose one has employed as safeguard in one of pools, so having recreational funs like swiming will not add any extral experience. morover,
in addition, having no distincion with our own job and our hobbies makes the life boring and deprive us having excitement. for example, for a bank clerk doing hobbies that not needs any physical movements is not suitable, it is better to get busy that force him to tackles muscales. playing football, walking, doing tennis, swimming, mountain climbing and bodybuilding could be ideal examples here.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned materials we can reach a conclusive cconclusion. Generaly, we can say it is appropriate to use our time efficiently by having phisical activity which has not affinity to the our cuurent job. admittedly, doing a sport that do not make us more stronger becasue we do same movements in our daily work.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to succeed in a new job, the ability to adapt oneself to the new environment is more important than having profound knowledge about this job. 81
- The extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success 80
- Which of the following would you most like to change to improve your health? The kind of food you eat, the amount of exercise or the level of stress. 78
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else. 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, therefore, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31125827815 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97880765255 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.662251655629 0.524837075471 126% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.5565434498 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.571428571 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195845271676 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604714854004 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480114927968 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111221384689 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199868089419 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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