Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Technology has affected human lives for all over the years. It is helping to the world’s development with the emergence of tech devices such as smartphones, tablets and computers. Personally, I believe that children should play outside and interact with the others rather than watching television or playing computer. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, children need to exercise and practice all possible sports because they spend more energy than adults. In addition, exercise helps kids to lose weight avoiding child obesity. Staying in a front a television is not healthy for anyone and, therefore, it is so important to parents encourage their children to play outside and interact with the others. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I remember when I was a child and my parents allowed me to play outside with some friends that lived at the same street at the weekends. I used to start playing at the morning then I stopped to lunch with my parents and after that I came back to play until early night. Besides that, I studied over the week at the school and practiced soccer and basketball. I remember that I had an active life over my entire childhood. All these events helped to develop myself in a team environment when I played in tournaments and to be a healthy kid.
Furthermore, playing computer and video games do not help kids to interact with other kids. As a result, they do not have a social life and usually prefer staying at home. In these situations the role of parents is to talk with their children in order to present other hobbies rather than playing computer. For example, I have a cousin who is ten and he used to play computer for hours in a row. He did not practice any type of sports and, consequently, he gained a lot of weight. However, my uncles decided to reverse this situation. The first step they took was to take off all the devices from my cousin such as computer, smartphone and tablet. After that, they enrolled him in swimming and volleyball. Although my cousin did not enjoy at the beginning he decided to cooperate and endeavored in everything. As a result, he lost ten pounds in the first month and knew a lot of friends.
In conclusion, I strong believe that children should not spend time playing computer. Instead they need to play outside as much as they can. This is because it helps to be a healthy person and develops a social life interacting with the others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
... of friends. In conclusion, I strong believe that children should not spend time pla...
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Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...should not spend time playing computer. Instead they need to play outside as much as th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67346938776 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61141410951 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489795918367 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5664978574 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2692307692 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9615384615 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42307692308 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247114289833 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652360360597 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767165003315 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171617902717 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03430054473 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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