Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Na3oM on Thu, 10/11/2018 - 17:00

A family is the first and the foremost society that everyone involved it. The point that how people bring up is the most integral issue that affects many aspects of their future life. Since society now is becoming more and more diverse from before some people believe that the importance of relationships as an extended family is damped, but some others have a controversial idea from them. In my perspective, nowadays, advanced technology and the increase in living expenses, people are prohibited in relationships in an immediate family. However, they should pay more attention to have good communication with their extended family because of some incentive mentioned following.
To love one another is crucial humanity's characteristic. The loving family where everyone like each other is a great chance for everyone. Unfortunately, living expenses are high and both father and mother have to work most of the daytime to be able to effort their family’s demands. Furthermore, most of them take babysitter for their child or take the child to the kindergarten. So, a child may encounter with feeling love-starved in childhood ages. For overcoming this problem, scientists propose that they take the child in grandparent's home instead of doing noticed approaches. Being with grandparents can compensate the lacking parents' love for children and give them the sense of calm which boost from loving each other. As a result, having a beneficial connection with extended family, exclusively grandparents is important for having a carefree childhood.

Effective family communication makes cohesion between family members. The fact that parents are the first teacher for their children is undeniable. As mentioned above, nowadays family have not much time to be with their children. In the case, other family members are good alternatives for them. For parents who are inclined to raise the child with the culture akin to their ancestors having an extended relationship is the most beneficial challenge. Being in an extended family atmosphere help children to learn and imitate the families behavior and manner. So, the child of good breeding is the best heritage of ancestors for descendants.

Were you in an awkwardness there would no one to help but your family. The role of thriving technology is obvious in having a widespread connection between people all around a world and in nearness, also. However, when you are in trouble, family members are the kindest helper to you. It is possible to have ample friends in society, but people are busy and have many concerns by themselves. Consequently, Family members are the most attainable ones in case there is a problem.
In the sum, Since, the family is the basic structure in the society, family members are the first friends and lovers for one is participating in that. Not only extended family is as important as before, but its importance should be more highlighted as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from them. In my perspective, nowadays, advanced technology and the increase in ...
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Line 4, column 530, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'families'' or 'family's'?
Suggestion: families'; family's
... help children to learn and imitate the families behavior and manner. So, the child of g...
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Line 6, column 200, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ple all around a world and in nearness, also. However, when you are in trouble, fami...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2465.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20042194093 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89276204453 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487341772152 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4969134497 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2962962963 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129406915998 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407376473409 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354374997765 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849009167029 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183445991311 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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