Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no denying fact that dignitaries are the idols whose behavior and style influence plenty of people all around the world. Among the diverse groups of the people who are most affected by celebrities, Young adults are of great attention. In most cases, the younger people's personality has not shaped enough to stay stable despite external factors. From my perspective, that is why they are the majority of people who care about the way their idols think and behave. In the following essay, I will delve into the most prominent reasons for this viewpoint.
First of all, the young adults are more exposed to the latest news about famous people which is widespread in different means of communication such an Internet, television and magazines. To be frank, the young people usually spend much of their time on social media, and that makes them more imitative of others opinions. In contrast, older people are more busy with their job and family issues, and they do not have enough time to allocate to these kinds of news. For most of the senior residents, checking the lives of famous people seems to be not only unattractive but also a waste of the time.
Furthermore,this group of young people are not sufficiently mature, and their personality and their goals are not defined well that can easily change, especially by following their role models. For instance, we as young residents, all admire particular successful people, and as we want our lives to have the same progress, their ideas and the way of their living easily influence us. Not surprisingly, this reason also does not fit older people as more than half of their lives have passed, and they have accomplished their goals and are more likely to be willing to have a relaxed life without the pressure of this news.
In a word, in a modern world younger people have the opportunity to find their positive role models and follow their mindset and set their goals the way that satisfy their destinies. that is why most of them are entirely affected by their idols.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, well, for instance, in contrast, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51657201246 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.9805304849 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158791872069 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600084770255 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362634328186 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990609180003 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391166263517 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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