Do you agree or disagree?
in the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives
It is crystal clear that in some steps of our life we run into puzzeling situation and we need a hand with a help. By passing time and ages, the problem become different and the controvertioal question is that, whether young people in this age are depend on their parents in make a decision or not. In my opinion, despite the sophisticated age that we live in there, youth are more independent than the past ages, the ensuing paragraphs explain my reasons for this position.
First of all, contemporary youth are less depend on their parents due to the fact that they are more educated than the younger ones in the past, they have variety of knowledge helping them to their decision or in difficulties. For example, if I want to choose my major in university, I don't consulate with my parents because they don't have academic education and they can give me a good advice.
Secondly, we live in the information age and access to the internet and technolog make the life easear than the past. This is because, people can search and use on-line consulating center to give advice specially when they are in emergency. Besides, the world dramaticly changed in the past decade hence, their sulotion are doesn't work in this day. For instance, if you have some computer problem, you can ask the solution in on-line computer service easily and fix the problem. Of course, some non-educated parents couldn't help you in such a situation.
In summation, today young people are less depended on their parents they can solve their problems individualy and in some situation give hand with a help to their friends. This is because they are more educated than their parents and tremendous source of information and also expert people are can make a better advice and solution than their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: good advice
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81818181818 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58188546778 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503246753247 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.0162569396 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.666666667 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301469245561 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112550716305 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921140968674 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192657733222 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653499826117 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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