Do you aree or disagree with the following statement?Students should not take part time job while they are studying in universities

It goes without saying that, we as Homo sapiens, live in an age when our lifestyle has undergone extreme changes and became more complex. Nowadays, everyone tends to become literate to open up and reserve a valuable social position. In this regard, every parent tends to send their children to schools and accordingly reach to the university to pursue their ambitions, even the poorest families. Meanwhile, are the families that can't afford their education's expenses, so the students get forced to have a pate-time job besides their studying. This issue has provoked controversial argument so that some people are in believing that this unacceptable; whereas other takes the opposite point of view. The following essay takes an elaborating look to this statement to reach a rational conclusion.
There is no denying that working and studying simultaneously is an arduous task, but it has some benefits too. Advocators of this notion support it by giving some reasons; including making students independent, having a source of income, helping their family financially, learning life management, gaining experience and ultimately becoming a real man. Indeed, by working along with the school the chance of finding an appropriate job after graduation goes up. Furthermore, this makes it feasible to become familiar with each occupation which subsequently leads to better major choosing. Above all, working and studying at the same time causes to make a connection between academic environment and workplace and avoid having unilateral living.
On the other hand, doing the same job concurrently is meaningless for some individuals. They claim the reduction of both works' quality as a major reason, especially being a student and employed. The students bear many stresses during each semester particularly when the final exams begin. Adding the pressure of work to this threatens their health. Research performed at Tehran University, Iran, shows that those students' works during their education have lower GPA and academic record than the other, conversely, are more successful to get hired or start a business. Other investigation, in this regard, conducted by a group of psychologists and sociologists indicates that over 64% of famous capitalists have working experience during their education.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned materials we can reach a conclusive conclusion that it mostly depends on each person that how they are capable to handle both tasks simultaneously. From my perspective, it is normal to focus on one business and try to be unique and outstanding.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion:
...s and try to be unique and outstanding.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, conversely, furthermore, if, look, so, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38669950739 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97870840773 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628078817734 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4269229382 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.105263158 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134425187586 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039279065109 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350340964486 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706052860169 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300904529686 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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