Education is a very important thing in life specialy for young people Some of mother or father prefer to give their kids some money as agift when they get a high score I thing this is a nice concept and in this essy I will illustirate two reasons that why | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Education is a very important thing in life specialy for young people. Some of mother or father prefer to give their kids some money as agift when they get a high score, I thing this is a nice concept,and in this essy I will illustirate two reasons that why I feel that.
Begin with, when parents give their kids rewared like money , this way considerd as a positive reimforcement which lead to increase abehavior (studying) and encourage continouse of it . In my life I have example about that . my son got four in math test before three month ago, so I gave him 20$ as a rewared to keep working hard and as away to told him that we aprode of his demand. After that he used to study hard in all topic and his level become higher.He is in advance math class right now.
In addition, when children get some money due to thier good job. they learn that great efforts are benefacial also will know the value and importance of the money ,furthuremore they learn how to save it and when use it. moreover this will stronge thier personality and help them to choose a suitable career therfore, so bthey can build a correct futur. for instance , when I was in middle school my parent used to give me some money when I do agreat jobe. I often save The money that mom and dad always give it to me. When I went to high school, I can use my money to buy a new phone .So I was very happy because I have an independent personality to decide what to do also, recognize the importance of education and the good results that may get in the futur.
In conclusion, for positive reinforcemnt that the students may get from parent as a results of doing well in school in addition to built a stronge independent personality and healthy behaiver ,I prefer giving money as gift for school age kids.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35347432024 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4397575739 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549848942598 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8244033092 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.846153846 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.5376344086 488% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458553195534 0.236089414692 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152348079042 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.189165844774 0.0737576698707 256% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.320085296902 0.150856017488 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.334878525119 0.0645574589148 519% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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