famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have much more privacy than they have.
In every country, there are some renowned entertiners and athletes, who have a profound influence on the other people. In my opinion the chance of having some information about their private life can help people to have a more sustainable life. In what follows, I will aptly elaborate on my perspective.
The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that since many people are the famous people's opponent, the famous people can help them to improve their life and lead to a prosperous life, because the opponents detect their behavior, and want to learn how they have these reputation among people, and this brings about a sustainable society which all people want to success in a moral way. For example, since volleyballists of national team in our country have a good reputaion among their opponents for their healthy life, their fans attempt to have a strong body, and some of them do exersices or go to the gyms, too. Consequently, most of their fans' bodies are fit and healthy.
Another equally important reason is that famous people encourage others to do the same work as themselves. In other words, when they dedicate their properties to charity, people are enthusiastic to help the charities too. Therefore, the miserable people would have a approperiate life which some of their problems would be solved and their hope of life would increase to a high degree. Selena Gomez's devoting is a compelling example of this. I am a Selena's fan and I know some other fans who when we saw her money-devoting to African children, we took it into consideration that why we do not do the same. As a result some of my friends and I dedicated some of our toys and school appliances to the poor of our country.
In conclusion, It is beneficial to know about the famous people's lives because we would learn from their way of success and use it in our lives. Also, because they encourage us to do the same morally work as they do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...people to have a more sustainable life. In what follows, I will aptly elaborate on...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this reputation' or 'these reputations'?
Suggestion: this reputation; these reputations
...havior, and want to learn how they have these reputation among people, and this brings about a s...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a moral way" with adverb for "moral"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ociety which all people want to success in a moral way. For example, since volleyballists of n...
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Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, since volleyballists of national team in our country have a good reputaion amo...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...refore, the miserable people would have a approperiate life which some of their p...
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Line 11, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to do the same morally work as they do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73372781065 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68211870033 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514792899408 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.8205383725 48.9658058833 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.285714286 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141998884718 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513723696193 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515754636041 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103191758316 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043444695134 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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