People often buy things not because they need them but because other people have them.
Some people claim that people buy products because somebody have and Think negative about it. I strongly agree with the statement. I feel this way for two reasons that I will examine in this essay.
First of all, people feel lonely if they do not have things that other people have. Although they can have information of things from many ways like internet, They cannot understand the things deeply. Obviously, this can make them feel distance between people who have things and this evidently make them lonely. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. When I was middle school student, most of students had skateboard but I did not. Because I do not have skateboard, I do not know well about skateboard. I felt lonely. I did not like this feeling. Although I have bike as a transportation, I finally bought skateboard. This experience proves that people buy what they do not really need but others have to escape feel of lonely which is caused by difference between them. Also, I am sure that If I had not bought the skateboard, I would not stop feeling lonely when my friends are talking about skateboard.
Second, the things that other people have but they not look very useful and helpful to them. They often do not think the disadvantage of the things and just think the advantage of the things. This deceives them to think the things are really need for them. There was survey conducted by psychology major with 1000 citizens as respondents. The goal of the survey was to know people’s thinking about the things that they do not have. Most of respondents claimed that they feel attractive to the things that they do not have but others have. Also, about 78% of respondents claim that they can find flaws of what they really feel attractive. This survey proves that people feel attractive to what others have but they do not.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people buy what they do not really need but others have. This is because they feel alone and the products that others have feels attractive to them.
- How is your generation different from your parent s generation 60
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- People often buy things not because they need them but because other people have them 80
- young people today are less dependent on their parents compared to the past 60
- doing exercise is more needed for older people than younger people 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...at people buy products because somebody have and Think negative about it. I strongly...
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Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...ence. When I was middle school student, most of students had skateboard but I did not. Because I...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'skateboarded'.
Suggestion: skateboarded
...le school student, most of students had skateboard but I did not. Because I do not have sk...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'skateboarded'.
Suggestion: skateboarded
...le school student, most of students had skateboard but I did not. Because I do not have sk...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'skateboarded'.
Suggestion: skateboarded
...rd but I did not. Because I do not have skateboard, I do not know well about skateboard. I...
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Line 3, column 579, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'biked'.
Suggestion: biked
... not like this feeling. Although I have bike as a transportation, I finally bought s...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...ves them to think the things are really need for them. There was survey conducted by...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the respondents') or simply say ''Most respondents''.
Suggestion: Most of the respondents; Most respondents
...about the things that they do not have. Most of respondents claimed that they feel attractive to th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, really, second, so, well, as to, i feel, in conclusion, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7094972067 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46790199265 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405027932961 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7512420707 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.25 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9166666667 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.479575577742 0.236089414692 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151126533259 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135910461948 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346982801247 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909146288529 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.54 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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