Imagine that two different companies have offered you a Job. One company offers average pay and expects you to work for a normal number of hours each week. (For example, in the United States, 40 hours per week Is often standard.) The other company offers much higher pay but expects you to work many more than the normal number of hours each week.
In the past several decades, the world has gone through massive changes on both a societal and an individual level. Nowadays, more and more people face dilemmas in job choice. The debate over whether people should choose a high-paid job with little free time or a relatively low-paid job with more free time is still fierce. Some may assert that choosing a job with more free time means people can spend more time with their family and friends. However, I hold this view differently. People should select a high-paid job with relatively little free time.
To begin with, a high-salary job allows people to sharpen their abilities. As in common sense, people who have high salaries always mean they have more responsibilities at the same time. They bear huge expectations from their superiors and extensive competition among their colleagues. As an old saying goes, “No cross, no crown.” All of this pressure strains their nerves and, meanwhile, pushes them toward. They are more urgent to improve themselves and acquire new knowledge in order to stand out from the crowd. On the other hand, people who choose a job with low rewards lead a comfortable life. Less competition dampens their enthusiasm for their job and hinders them from further improvement.
Admittedly, more free time gives people time flexibility. Having more time at their disposal means they can have a better work-time balance and less stress, bringing them a more peaceful life. Nevertheless, having much more free time does not necessarily mean more happiness. A high-paid job enables people to reach financial freedom; they can easily plan a trip with their whole family without any financial concerns or go to the best restaurant in town with their friends and enjoy a wonderful meal. Furthermore, being wealthy provides people with an excellent opportunity to mingle with more talented people; making friends with them is exciting and refreshing, which can also expand their social circle.
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly a wiser choice to choose a high-paid job with relatively less free time for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'asserts'.
Suggestion: asserts
...ore free time is still fierce. Some may assert that choosing a job with more free time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13043478261 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64709262189 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559420289855 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2346178658 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1578947368 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1578947368 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0467922762976 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0206565716414 0.076458572812 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0180130676047 0.0737576698707 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0385750660993 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120209021311 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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