Independent writing TPO 51
In this modern world, the technology achieved aot of improvments and are going to invent more technology devices. one of the most important and exciting invention was television. there is a cotroversy between people about effects of tv. Some of them are in the opinion that its disadventages are more than advetages. Others believe in the opposite way like me. I, personally speaking, feel that televisions have pros and cons, but their positive effects are more. In what followed, the distinct reasons supporting my perseptive and viewpoint are vidicated.
To begin with, tvs can enhance population's knowledge. Numerous of shows and programs are displayed on tv such as discovery shows on the documentry channels, so people can watch them and gain new significant information about animals, technology and so on. To illustrate this, I remember that one day I was alone at home and decieded to watch television program. By watching discovery channel, I figured out that elephants are scared of ants, such a sweet fact.
Furthermore, television has lots of entertainment shows which make family relationships closer and more vigorous. family members sit front of the tv and watch programs togather and laugh alot. To put it into a more vivid picture, I wasn't quite close to my sister-in-law. one beautiful and funny night, while all of the family member were watching Elen show, she and I laugh alot and told togather about the same events happened in our life, and this made our friendship stronger.
Third of all, it can make us awre of hazardous and dangerous events and disaster which might occure in the future, and it can influence on our future plans. As an example, my family and I supposed to go to a trip to the north of Iran where rains most of the time. A day before going to the trip, I heard from the news on television that there is a danger of flood there in few days. Hence, we didn't go there and stayed alive.
In conclusion, taking all the aforemention reasons, I think television have more positive effects in our life. I feel in this way because of getting new efficient information and making our relationships stronger and being safe by getting danger alarms.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
...oing to invent more technology devices. one of the most important and exciting inve...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... and exciting invention was television. there is a cotroversy between people about ef...
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Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Family
...relationships closer and more vigorous. family members sit front of the tv and watch p...
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Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... To put it into a more vivid picture, I wasnt quite close to my sister-in-law. one be...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
... wasnt quite close to my sister-in-law. one beautiful and funny night, while all of...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...w. one beautiful and funny night, while all of the family member were watching Elen show, ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...r of flood there in few days. Hence, we didnt go there and stayed alive. In conclus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, so, third, while, i feel, i suppose, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87131367292 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78465178991 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565683646113 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.1460162223 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5238095238 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7619047619 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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