It is important to make sure that others（influential people or potential employers know）about your strengths and accomplishments; if not, you will be never successful in life.
Commonly, people struggle for promotions and good scores in school and work to be successful in life. Some people believe that it is significant to make leaders know their strengths and achievements to realize their goals. In my opinion, I agree with this statement. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
For starters, potential employers will give me more precious opportunities if they understand my advantages and accomplishments, which can lead me to success. By contrast, they are likely to assign frivolous and dirty work to me if they underestimate my capability. The experience of my friend, Jack, is a compelling model of that. He participated in a project last year. Although he was only a bachelor, he had published large amounts of articles on professional journals before. In case of being neglected, he showed his academic achievements to his mentor a week before he joined that project. Therefore, the mentor appreciated his diligence and enthusiasm, designating him as the leader of one group. If he had not show his accomplishments, he would have missed this opportunity and done some repeated work instead.
Besides, influential people may offer me some useful advice after having a deep understand of my strengths and accomplishments. Since they obtain an edge on experience and professional knowledge over ordinary people, their advice may help me avoid many obstacles and pitfalls. For example, I used to consult my mentor on my future career because I did not know what to do after graduation. I showed him my resume, on which I listed my advantages and awards I won in school. After reviewing that resume, he told me that it was more appropriate for me to be a lawyer than to be a justice or a legal journalist because my experience as an intern in Moot Courts and a legal journal was related with what employers in law firms most required. Under his suggestions, I successfully passed an interview of a elite law firm and earn a decent salary now. My advantages became solid competitive edges in work. This example shows that influential people can provide sensible suggestions to help you move from school to work without much trouble.
I admit that showing advantages to others cannot manage the problem alone on the way to success. Working hard matters more. However, if we ignore letting others know our accomplishments, they will not recognize our abilities. Only by combining showing strengths and hard work together can we achieve our goals.
Based on the reasons stated above, I assume showing your strengths and accomplishments to influential people is helpful because it can get me exposed to opportunities and valuable advice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'showed', 'shown'.
Suggestion: showed; shown
... the leader of one group. If he had not show his accomplishments, he would have miss...
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Line 5, column 800, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., I successfully passed an interview of a elite law firm and earn a decent salary...
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Line 5, column 1036, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om school to work without much trouble. I admit that showing advantages to other...
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Line 9, column 189, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to opportunities and valuable advice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06013363029 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07400176605 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541202672606 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.3283105436 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.88 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.96 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177362420751 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450411513971 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518448755725 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113648794237 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451488995287 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.